My rough draft and my final draft differ mostly in it being more personal. In my first rough draft, I talked a lot about the topics but not enough about how I feel and how it effects me. I also focused on too many points. Although they were all good points, it made it difficult to go into depth about one specific one. I decided to expand on one idea, such as my values and view on life changing due to reading Ishmael and it's major connection being tied directly to literacy. I added the idea that the broadening of literacy makes individuals become more creative and expressive. An example would be Malcolm X, he felt like not being literate caged him because he was not able to follow certain arguments and participate. But reading, writing, and speaking opened his horizons to see and have a better understanding of life in general. It's like a deaf person, not ever being taught a language, that person would have a very hard time expressing themselves, interacting with others, and being self-aware. The meeting with Ms. Spencer helped me guide my essay in the right direction because I honestly didn't know what I was doing wrong. Even though the meeting was brief, I feel like a clarified what exactly I was supposed to aim for in my literacy narrative. I think the strongest aspect of my essay would be my sources and knowledge on my topics. I can talk for days on out about the major themes, ideas, and motifs, but I think my weak point arises when I tried to tie it into a personal matter.
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